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Young lovers
link hands
run down
a mustard field,
the recalcitrant yellow harvests
kiss them in callous haste
the day is at its end; so
before a natural dusk sets in
--engage them
in one crooked love-dance.
The figures oscillate
without volition
hearts contract passions
nudge them to notice
a twilight spraying
-paradigms of love
Love thrives on
...in slow romance
...in slow romance
-it grows, rolls, strengthens;
intoxicating air, full of spicy, tangy
odor
touches the pinnacles,
two keep rolling -outspread and quivering
like little love-birds
until they’re furthest
from release...
he begs
he begs
she cloys
two hearts:
lose no time in wiring together.
Caught in the final moments
of exuberance- the light dies…
Caught in the final moments
of exuberance- the light dies…
escapes the frame
with impish delight
with impish delight
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Credits
Image - Love in the air by Anand
Courtesy - Apple Blossom's Photography via www.blogaton.in
Also linked to : http://poetryblogroll.blogspot.in/2013/12/poetry-pantry-178.html
Also linked to : http://poetryblogroll.blogspot.in/2013/12/poetry-pantry-178.html
Beautiful ! Beautiful !!
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Deleteha. what a delightful read...seeing teo young loves...or older...lost in the throes of love...playful...and lovely...
ReplyDeleteOw....Glad you see you here... and tickled pink that you liked the romance...This is about two young lovers, Brian!! Smiles...
DeleteThanks a bunch :)
Romance at its best!
ReplyDeleteVandana,
DeleteLove your enthusiasm...:) Thank you!
Pleasant and beautiful lines as always. I hope you are having a good weekend, Panchali di. :)
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Deleteawww! very sweet and beautiful...as if everything connived to get them and keep them together
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Deletefabulous
ReplyDeleteThanks Cifar...:)
Deleteit always is a pleasure to read your writings :)
ReplyDeleteI am glad you liked it, thanks for coming by. :))
DeleteWhat a beautiful description of two lovers frolicking in the yellow mustard grass.
ReplyDeleteLovely imagery and a heartfelt poem. So good to be able to comment here again now that you have changed your commentary format.
rallentenda..Thanks for the praise...am overwhelmed! Thanks for your comments too...do appreciate. Btw, I didn't make any changes in the commentary format..maybe, it was a temporary glitch.
DeleteGood to see you here, as always :)
"Impish delight" - loved that.
ReplyDeleteI am glad you liked it, thanks for coming by. :))
DeleteI love how your poem engages our senses, the colors, smell of spices and the mention of love-birds! Beautiful and romantic!
ReplyDeleteThank you. It's a is a huge compliment...! I am much gratified, Gabriella... :))))
DeleteGood to see you here... as always... :)))
You have captured so well the experience of young love, Panchali. The joy, the playfulness, the passion -- all rolled into one well crafted poem!
ReplyDeleteThank you, Mary, for the visit... you always add to the value of the blog... and I love that... :))))
DeleteIt reminds me of one of those Bollywood sequences of lovers frolicking in mustard field. It's a very picturesque poem.
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DeleteThank you...! I'm so pleased you liked this... :))))) Hope to see you more on these pages...
brilliantly done.kinda reminds me of DDLJ.loved the vivid details.
ReplyDeleteOw..DDLJ was a lovely movie, Abin...and it is one of the movies that depicts the beautiful backdrop of a lush yellow mustard field of Punjab especially... the song sequence here, "Tujhe Dekha To Yeh Jaana Sanam", shows their blossoming love, while the setting adds a nice touch to the romantic scene....
DeleteThanks so much for that beautiful comment.
बेहतरीन रचना सुन्दर भाव लिए हुए
ReplyDeleteThank you, Shashi...:)
DeleteWelcome Panchali!
ReplyDeleteI missed you and poems ...
This is a balm for the soul.
Greetings from far away Polish.
Lucia
Greetings from India!!
DeleteThank you, my friend, Lucia. I know I have to read a lot of your stuff... sorry I have been preoccupied.
Thanks for the visit... :))))
lovely :)
ReplyDeleteThank you so much, Natasha...:)
Deletebeing an incurable romantic this was very appealing... :)
ReplyDeleteThank you...! I'm so pleased you liked this, Robert... :)))))
DeletePanchali, this was lovely and tender and completely charming. I loved it!
ReplyDeleteThank you Talon! :)
DeletePanchalidi....i love this colorful world....i can even hear the tune...'tujhe dekha...'...
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Yes...of course!! That song virtually takes you through the mustard fields of Punjab, giving you an idea of the beauty it withholds....
DeleteThanks Sumana. :))
Ahh...so lovely...beautiful imagery :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Aditi...am so pleased you liked this..:))))
Deletebefore a natural dusk sets in
ReplyDelete--engage them
in one crooked love-dance.
The figures oscillate
without volition
Great thoughts Panchali! One must take extra efforts to act before the opportunity fizzle away. Nicely!
Hank
Kaykuala,
DeleteI am much gratified... :)))) Thanks for that lovely comment...
Lovely and oh! so romantic. Loved it.
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DeleteBeautifully written poem :). Your blog is a collection of such good poetry. Glad to have stumbled on it. :)
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DeleteGlad you liked the blog... thanks for that HUGE compliment. :)))
Love to see you here...and hope to see you more on these pages! :))
Ah, your words always transcend me to a world so different than our own! So lovely and pure! So very beautiful!
ReplyDeleteAww...Arti, Thanks for the compliment... you are very good for a writer's ego... :))))
DeleteMany thanks...
awesome is the word ,how are you mam ,missed your posts :) :)
ReplyDeleteYes, have been a little preoccupied, Vinisha. Thanks for the encouragement...it means a lot to me!!! :)))
DeletePanchali,I had written my comments here, but it is missing. How could it happen? This is a very romantic poem. Your poetry is superb.
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DeleteAm glad you came back...Glad you liked this.. I am pleased. :)))))
Thanks a bunch.
It took me to the atmosphere you built... Beautiful Panchali di :)
ReplyDeleteThank you, Amit :-)
DeleteI can imagine them, running trough the fields, finding refuge for some romance ;)
ReplyDeleteI am so pleased that my words resonated with you, Megha...Thanks for coming by,,,,:))
DeleteI just couldn't stop picturing SRK and Kajol in the mustard field! Lovely! :)
ReplyDeleteAkanksha!! What a pleasure to see you here...! I am thrilled you liked it.. and the depiction...:)) Thanks a bunch!!
DeleteVery good one.
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Wow...thanks for that lovely comment, hyperCRYPTICAL! ( interesting handle)......! I'm so pleased you liked this... :)))))
DeleteDo visit again..please.
Beautiful poem. Opening lines reminded me of DDLJ's song. :)
ReplyDeleteBeautiful ,Panchali.
DeleteI am so glad you enjoyed this effort.. Thanks for the visit, Saru... :))))
DeleteThanks rudraprayaga :)
Deletethis is Exquisite ma'm. Loved it!
ReplyDeleteThanks Anil for that wonderful comment and for following me too!! :))
DeleteYour poetry flows like a river.. Smooth and gracefully..
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Ow, many many thanks, Sidharth. I shall definitely check out your space soon...Thanks for the encouraging comment!! :)
DeleteSo smooth and fluent play of words ... awesome :-)
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SiS---Thanks for your visit and feedback. I appreciate it very much.... :)) Thanks for the tag...have already decided to write :))
DeleteCongrats on winning Blog-a-Ton!!!
DeleteSomeone is Special
Thank you so much, SiS...:) Thanks for the prompts and motivations..:)
DeleteSensational poem of Love! I just saw the couples (owls) on the lower side of your blog after reading your poem :)
ReplyDeleteDear Uma, What a lovely comment...! Thank you so much.. :)) And those li'l owls have been here since ages..aren't they cute ?? How come you didn't notice them before..:)))
DeleteThanks so much for stopping by....
Your comment has delighted me completely...Ashwini!! Thank you...:))
ReplyDeleteReading this was a treat to the soul. You weave magic with words :)
ReplyDeleteOw, Glad you liked this, lady with a magic quill.. I am so very pleased:)) Thanks a lot!!!
DeleteI love reading your poetry... :)
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Thanks Simran...Your words delight me..♥ :)
Deleteyoung hearts linger on as we have left behind reading your poem here...great as ever panch
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