Sunday, December 01, 2013

In To the Arms Of Twilight~








This post has been published by me as a part of the Blog-a-Ton 44; the forty-fourth edition of the online marathon of Bloggers; where we decide and we write. To be part of the next edition, visit and start following Blog-a-Ton. 



Young lovers
link hands
run down
a mustard field,
the recalcitrant yellow harvests
kiss them in callous haste
the day is at its end; so
before a natural dusk sets in
           --engage them
in one crooked love-dance.
The figures oscillate
             without volition
hearts contract passions
                         nudge them to notice
a twilight spraying
               -paradigms of love
Love thrives on
             ...in slow romance
                 -it grows, rolls, strengthens;
intoxicating air, full of spicy, tangy odor
touches the pinnacles,
 two keep rolling -outspread and quivering
like little love-birds
               until they’re furthest
                    from release...
          he begs
she cloys
               two hearts:
lose no time in wiring together.
Caught in the final moments
of exuberance- the light dies…
                  escapes the frame 
  with impish delight
    





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85 comments:

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    1. Thank you..thank you..Purnendu! Good to have you here!:)

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  2. ha. what a delightful read...seeing teo young loves...or older...lost in the throes of love...playful...and lovely...

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    1. Ow....Glad you see you here... and tickled pink that you liked the romance...This is about two young lovers, Brian!! Smiles...
      Thanks a bunch :)

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    1. Vandana,
      Love your enthusiasm...:) Thank you!

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  4. Pleasant and beautiful lines as always. I hope you are having a good weekend, Panchali di. :)

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    1. Thank you. Appreciate your compliment and the visit, Divya! Hope you are doing well.... :))))

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  5. awww! very sweet and beautiful...as if everything connived to get them and keep them together

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    1. Awww...thanks a lot, Akila :)

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  6. it always is a pleasure to read your writings :)

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    1. I am glad you liked it, thanks for coming by. :))

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  7. What a beautiful description of two lovers frolicking in the yellow mustard grass.
    Lovely imagery and a heartfelt poem. So good to be able to comment here again now that you have changed your commentary format.

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    1. rallentenda..Thanks for the praise...am overwhelmed! Thanks for your comments too...do appreciate. Btw, I didn't make any changes in the commentary format..maybe, it was a temporary glitch.
      Good to see you here, as always :)

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  8. "Impish delight" - loved that.

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    1. I am glad you liked it, thanks for coming by. :))

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  9. I love how your poem engages our senses, the colors, smell of spices and the mention of love-birds! Beautiful and romantic!

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    1. Thank you. It's a is a huge compliment...! I am much gratified, Gabriella... :))))

      Good to see you here... as always... :)))

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  10. You have captured so well the experience of young love, Panchali. The joy, the playfulness, the passion -- all rolled into one well crafted poem!

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    1. Thank you, Mary, for the visit... you always add to the value of the blog... and I love that... :))))

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  11. It reminds me of one of those Bollywood sequences of lovers frolicking in mustard field. It's a very picturesque poem.

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    1. Welcome to my space, madhumakhi. (love that handle)-
      Thank you...! I'm so pleased you liked this... :))))) Hope to see you more on these pages...

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  12. brilliantly done.kinda reminds me of DDLJ.loved the vivid details.

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    1. Ow..DDLJ was a lovely movie, Abin...and it is one of the movies that depicts the beautiful backdrop of a lush yellow mustard field of Punjab especially... the song sequence here, "Tujhe Dekha To Yeh Jaana Sanam", shows their blossoming love, while the setting adds a nice touch to the romantic scene....
      Thanks so much for that beautiful comment.

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  13. बेहतरीन रचना सुन्दर भाव लिए हुए

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  14. Welcome Panchali!
    I missed you and poems ...
    This is a balm for the soul.
    Greetings from far away Polish.
    Lucia

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    1. Greetings from India!!
      Thank you, my friend, Lucia. I know I have to read a lot of your stuff... sorry I have been preoccupied.
      Thanks for the visit... :))))

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    1. Thank you so much, Natasha...:)

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  16. being an incurable romantic this was very appealing... :)

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    1. Thank you...! I'm so pleased you liked this, Robert... :)))))

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  17. Panchali, this was lovely and tender and completely charming. I loved it!

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  18. Panchalidi....i love this colorful world....i can even hear the tune...'tujhe dekha...'...
    :D

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    1. Yes...of course!! That song virtually takes you through the mustard fields of Punjab, giving you an idea of the beauty it withholds....
      Thanks Sumana. :))

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  19. Ahh...so lovely...beautiful imagery :)

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    1. Thanks Aditi...am so pleased you liked this..:))))

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  20. before a natural dusk sets in
    --engage them
    in one crooked love-dance.
    The figures oscillate
    without volition

    Great thoughts Panchali! One must take extra efforts to act before the opportunity fizzle away. Nicely!

    Hank

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    1. Kaykuala,
      I am much gratified... :)))) Thanks for that lovely comment...

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  21. Lovely and oh! so romantic. Loved it.

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    1. Thanks sweetheart...so good to see you here :)) Do visit again, Bushra.

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  22. Beautifully written poem :). Your blog is a collection of such good poetry. Glad to have stumbled on it. :)

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    1. III higH...So good to have you here. Welcome to my space. !!
      Glad you liked the blog... thanks for that HUGE compliment. :)))
      Love to see you here...and hope to see you more on these pages! :))

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  23. Ah, your words always transcend me to a world so different than our own! So lovely and pure! So very beautiful!

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    1. Aww...Arti, Thanks for the compliment... you are very good for a writer's ego... :))))
      Many thanks...

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  24. awesome is the word ,how are you mam ,missed your posts :) :)

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    1. Yes, have been a little preoccupied, Vinisha. Thanks for the encouragement...it means a lot to me!!! :)))

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  25. Panchali,I had written my comments here, but it is missing. How could it happen? This is a very romantic poem. Your poetry is superb.

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    1. Usha...I searched the scam-comment section just now and didn't any waiting for my confirmation. Sad....
      Am glad you came back...Glad you liked this.. I am pleased. :)))))
      Thanks a bunch.

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  26. It took me to the atmosphere you built... Beautiful Panchali di :)

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  27. I can imagine them, running trough the fields, finding refuge for some romance ;)

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    1. I am so pleased that my words resonated with you, Megha...Thanks for coming by,,,,:))

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  28. I just couldn't stop picturing SRK and Kajol in the mustard field! Lovely! :)

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    1. Akanksha!! What a pleasure to see you here...! I am thrilled you liked it.. and the depiction...:)) Thanks a bunch!!

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    1. Thank you very much, Rajesh! :)

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  30. I do so love this - a beautiful beautiful write.
    Anna :o]

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    1. Wow...thanks for that lovely comment, hyperCRYPTICAL! ( interesting handle)......! I'm so pleased you liked this... :)))))
      Do visit again..please.

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  31. Beautiful poem. Opening lines reminded me of DDLJ's song. :)

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    1. I am so glad you enjoyed this effort.. Thanks for the visit, Saru... :))))

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    2. Thanks rudraprayaga :)

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  32. Loved the quick flow of thoughts and words :-) Love can do this to all of us ;-) Wonderfully written :-)

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    1. Your comment has delighted me completely...Ashwini!! Thank you...:))

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  33. this is Exquisite ma'm. Loved it!

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    1. Thanks Anil for that wonderful comment and for following me too!! :))

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  34. Your poetry flows like a river.. Smooth and gracefully..

    Do drop in my blog. Would love to get comments from veterans like you ma'am..

    http://justsidding.com/2013/12/strangers-for-a-reason/

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    1. Ow, many many thanks, Sidharth. I shall definitely check out your space soon...Thanks for the encouraging comment!! :)

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  35. So smooth and fluent play of words ... awesome :-)

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    1. Thanks Amrit...coming from you, it means a lot to me :)

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  36. What a beautiful imagery Panchali! The emotions you bring in your words...awesome :) Keep writing for BAT! I have also tagged you here for a BlogAdda's contest. Please accept the tag and let me know your response.

    Someone is Special

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    1. SiS---Thanks for your visit and feedback. I appreciate it very much.... :)) Thanks for the tag...have already decided to write :))

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    2. Congrats on winning Blog-a-Ton!!!

      Someone is Special

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    3. Thank you so much, SiS...:) Thanks for the prompts and motivations..:)

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  37. Sensational poem of Love! I just saw the couples (owls) on the lower side of your blog after reading your poem :)

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    1. Dear Uma, What a lovely comment...! Thank you so much.. :)) And those li'l owls have been here since ages..aren't they cute ?? How come you didn't notice them before..:)))
      Thanks so much for stopping by....

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  38. Reading this was a treat to the soul. You weave magic with words :)

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    1. Ow, Glad you liked this, lady with a magic quill.. I am so very pleased:)) Thanks a lot!!!

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  39. I love reading your poetry... :)
    You make beautiful fusion of words and feelings..

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    1. Thanks Simran...Your words delight me..♥ :)

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  40. young hearts linger on as we have left behind reading your poem here...great as ever panch

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