I feel giddy with the pressure of age
Ties have frozen, tears must crystallize;
Cooped up in my room...not knowing the future...
lonesome and insecure...a life continues to live
bits of me....do I still want to prolong it?
My heart is bizarre...hard, energetic, nervy
It makes me see beyond the tangible
which my blurry eyes can't see
in life's Twilight....
How happy was my world….
With a paltry existence,
Tethered to the gleaming columns of my home
I traveled with passion and trust
I traveled with passion and trust
I loved boiling up a kettle every morning
Enjoyed stirring the cauldron of daal every night
Worked hard scrubbing the dirty linens
Painstakingly, I worked through a lot of grime
Ah, that arduous trip seems like
A waste of time now
in life's Twilight...
in life's Twilight...
I hear the Surf Excel Matic jingle
Raving, ranting,
swaying to a crazy rhythm
The 'vibrating
molecules' strike the life chord; and
give me
strength; it widens my face into a smile
I realize, I must soak no more!
The quivering ride
on my mind for sometime
Eyes and senses wake up,
and then I hear a whisper,
'Veer veer... so
that people understand
that wrinkled
visage is still profused with life
This is your
home...this is where you belong
You must reclaim the
space, guard it well
Let peace fight the time
Let peace fight the time
in Life's
Twilight,...'
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Very touching.
ReplyDeleteWow...first one to comment!! Great start...thanks, SG :)
Delete:) Best wishes!
ReplyDeleteThank you, Deepak!
Deletewhat a beautiful reminiscence into past and the present. very artistically crafted. The pic. too is most appropriate one.
ReplyDeletebest wishes.
So happy to see you here,Maun Vision. This is my tribute for all the grand old people who display such courage and calm, till the end. Thank you, I deeply value your accolade :))
DeleteHope to see you more on these pages...
Lot of feel here. Best wishes.
ReplyDeleteThanks for your very supportive response, Rajesh!!
DeleteThe first part sounded so painful. :(
ReplyDeleteBut, beautiful, beautiful writing, as always. I'm sure this post will stand out. All the best for the contest. :)
Thanks so much, Divya!
DeleteThis is just after observing the lives of some very old people around me. Strangely, they always seem to happen in tandem... forcing my pen so to speak. So, this is a kind of tribute, so to say:)
Thanks for your wishes and wonderful words of appreciation.
nice lines....
ReplyDeleteShah Nawaj, I guess, this is your first visit to my space. A warm welcome.I deeply value your accolade :))
DeleteThanks...
Wish you luck! Impactful! And, what an amazing header pic and the pic that went with this post.
ReplyDeleteComing from you Rachna, that was some compliment. I am sooo pleased you liked the treatment and the pics. Yeah...the header pic is amazing!!:)Thanks for the wishes...
DeleteThat touched..... deeep. Loved the way you weaved the heartfelt feelings and the theme of surf together into a wonderful fabric just like that picture! The work of a true artist :) Take a bow, you are awesome! All the very best to you :)
ReplyDeleteWow...Thank you for that delightful comment. It is MOST gratifying to win a pat on the back from someone you admire.:) You made my day, Arti!
DeleteWow! The pic was very very apt and your poetry as always flawless and touching :)
ReplyDeleteJaish, Your comment is of course the cherry on top....!! Thank you for your very 'sedate' words of appreciation...means so much :))
DeleteThanks for your warm wishes.... :)
Terrrefic as always Panchali
ReplyDeletebest luck
rajni
I deeply appreciate your reponse, Rajni. You have always been so kind and supportive. Wonderful to have you here again. You were surely missed. :)))Thanks...
DeleteSorely touching!
ReplyDeleteVery profound Panchali!!
All the best:)
Thanks Amit for your supportive response.
DeleteDealing IS a difficult task. But there is a very valid reason for all ages ought to deal with life---so, here's my tribute to all the grand old people I see around me :)
Glad you enjoyed :)
...loved that Fire of Forest on your home page:)
ReplyDeleteYes, Amit--- Even I loved that drongo in the middle of the fire --may be, it is called 'the flames of the forest'..!Good to note that you noticed...thanks!!
DeleteThe Surf thing is messing it up. But I guess it's just a fun thing.
ReplyDeleteThanks for the frank comment, Shovan...but, I had to insert that one piece of surf-talk...!! Definitely all for fun..
Deleteso touching :) all the best!
ReplyDeleteThanks Ash, for your time and wishes..:)
DeleteStraight from the heart! loved it:)
ReplyDeleteGood luck!!
Akanksha....Thank you for your compliment and wishes... :))Glad you enjoyed...
DeleteWoW sublime :)
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Thank you, Saikat :) Where are you..? Haven't seen you around for quite sometime...
DeleteWow..Very heart touching lines..:-)
ReplyDeleteThanks Nagini for your appreciative response. It seems I was able to communicate better than I thought I had...thank God! My eyes are greedily hooked on those i-pads :P lol...
DeleteBeautiful! Love that picture...
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot, Aunt Panchali, for your birthday wishes. We too are glad you are our friend and we found you here :O)
Wags,
Ginger, Buddy n Shadow
Dearest Ginger, Buddy n Shadow...awww..you guyz have added incredible value to my blog. I am so very grateful for doing that. ..Take care, visit again. Bring Mommy along :)))
DeleteHope you had a great b'day bash, Buddy.Keep coming..
lotss love n bow wow from Mogli...
Aunt Panchali
HI PANCHALI,
ReplyDeleteI wish you best wishes....superb and fantastically written...great go on..
once again best wishes..
Regards
Bhavik shah
Bhavik, So pleased you liked this. :)))
DeleteHappy to see you here always :)
Thanks a lot :)
Touching!!!
ReplyDeleteI like your title photo too.
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Thanks Anupama, for your visit and comment. I do appreciate. And yes, I will be in your space soon...very soon :) Sorry, I should have been there earlier :(
DeleteThanks for the reminder...
Very touching.. All the best :)
ReplyDeleteWelcome to my space, Anjali...am glad this 'touched' you:)
DeleteHope to see you more here...
Really deep thoughts, good luck!!!
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Thank you for being here with your appreciative response, ajeetboaz !!
DeleteWelcome to my space.:)
Do visit again :)
aww..you are so good with the words...loved it..and following u back!
ReplyDelete"Let peace fight the time
in Life's Twilight"
that was so good!
Good to see you here, the little princess.
DeleteI am sure, you know how it feels when a reader reads exactly what you want them to read. I am also certain you know how gratified a writer would feel....thanks a lot, my dear:)))))
And would love to see you more on these pages...xoxo
You have created some powerful imagery and then weaved the contest tag line into this. May be after the contest, I would knock off that line with a tweak and it would stand strong.
ReplyDeleteIndiwilds, thank you for being 'touched'. I don't know what else to say... :)))
Deletebtw, you may hate that 'motivational line', but your comment has pleased me nevertheless. It only proves that I was able to communicate better than I thought I had. :D
Thanks!
Very touchy and the ending of second last paragraph was simply brilliant. Loved the poem. I think we both have written two posts for this contest, one story and one poem. All the best to both of us :)
ReplyDeleteSaru, you paid me a wonderful compliment!! Don't know how to thank you enough... thank you so much.!!! But, it is so difficult to overtake you...I know :((
DeleteNevertheless...best of luck to both of us !!!!!
Pleased to have you here...always :)))
Panchalidi whenever I see an elderly person I always feel some day we will also reach that phase of life..your poem too gave a similar pain but the end was awesome..loved it so much..really!!! and all the luck for the contest..
ReplyDeleteRanita!! Good to have you read this... I thought you were busy:)
DeleteThank you for that warm comment.... :)
Must come over to your space soon...
Panchali you wrote this poem standing in an oldie's shoes it seems,it was so real.
ReplyDeleteAll the best.
Indu,
DeleteThank you for that lovely comment. She will live through me certainly.... :)))
This poem is so you..! I liked the title, the picture and the lines.
ReplyDeleteTouching and hopeful at the same time. All the best :D
Ghaz...Thank you for your kind words... I pray for her to be at peace too...:) Thanks for your wishes:)
DeleteOh it is great.....said so much that will linger long....
ReplyDeleteSreeja...You make me feel so good girl... thank you... :))
DeleteA moving tribute.... Nice to meet you ~
ReplyDeleteGood to have you here, Nilanjana :) Welcome to my space...thanks for the encouragement. Hope to see you more on these pages...:))
DeleteExcellent! You expressed rays of hope even life at brim...
ReplyDeleteWelcome to my post, Jeevan! Thanks for your appreciative comment...:))We must never lose hope..that's so real, isn't it? Just checked your post, the poem is poignant! Very nice....
DeleteThanks for being here..
Beautiful composition, Panchali! Best wishes for the contest!
ReplyDeleteThanks Rahul for your valuable comment and wishes.Thanks a ton for being here :)
DeleteSorry about this delayed revert :(