Sunday, July 01, 2012

TWO MINUTES-- THAT IS THE DEAL







This post has been published by me as a part of the Blog-a-Ton 29; the 29th Edition of the online marathon of Bloggers; where we decide and we write. To be part of the next edition, visit and start following Blog-a-Ton. The topic for this month is 'TWO MINUTES'.


Stay away from fleeting sensations of pleasure
Such pleasures are for the insanes,
They distort minds-- make people wrestle with life
Hearts pound, thoughts dry out;
Chaos becomes the distinct pattern of life
Temporary elation spreads evil.... so follow the right!

Listen to the inner voice, it speaks in soft tones
Crushes recalcitrant thoughts, brews incipient light
Solemnly with a gush, bypasses the cheating heart
It stirs the 'unconscious' shut in a semblance of sleep
Conscience is his other name---he's like a referee
He takes TWO MINUTES to perform this service!

Feel the fire within, with no guilt, weight of sin
The inner self has eyes you do not see; but, look for it
You will hear it thump; there's balm in its beats 
Gracefully banish the bad....let distilled virtues embrace your heart
Truth has a slow, delayed reaction; its effect takes long to show
But, goodnesss ebbs away all troubles...often repays the worse!

Grip the time tight in your palms
So that life moves,.... and your life lives
Scrub out the grime that has accumulated in the mind
Work lovingly around the ridges and into the grooves
Till the stains are blurred; silent words come through to you 
Be with your heart......be your own architect
Keep the echos intact, and the heart sympathetic!



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79 comments:

  1. Mmm! Loved the last part.

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    1. Thank you, Suresh. Delighted to have you here:)
      Hope to see you more on these pages..

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  2. बहुत बढ़िया कविता पांचाली जी
    विषय से पूरा न्याय किया है आपने

    बेसब्र न हो सब्र करो
    अपनी पारी का इंतज़ार करो

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    1. Thank you Shashiprakrash, I am glad you liked the composition...You mde my day!:))
      Keep visiting please.

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  3. well written, and all the best for BAT!

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    1. Thanks Ash...:))This was written in a haste just for the sake of participation...:)) Thanks for your wishes...

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  4. Thus making living incredibly worthy, magical in form! wow !

    you weave magic with words ! and I agree all it takes is two mins for the inner potential to surface out ... Cheers to the wonderful life and all the best for BAT ...

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    1. TTT !!
      That was a lovely compliment...! Thank you for getting involved with the poem that deeply...You made my day :)) Thanks a zillion!

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  5. Be your own architect -- Indeed!

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    1. Rachna,
      Pleasure to have you here... Believing I have your concurrence to continue..:)

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  6. Dear Di,

    Only you could have come up with this beautiful stuff in two minutes, very well crafted :)

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    1. Ghazala..Thanks for the lovely comment... coming from you that quite a compliment:))xoxo

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  7. Wow! You have woven a beautiful message in there...Excellent :)

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    1. Jayashree,
      Your visit and comment have delighted me... with the delight of being able to get the message in the end... thank you... :)))))

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  8. wow...absolutely beautiful...especially the concluding part:)

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    1. Amit, Thank you for the visit... your comments thrill me always.. :))))

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    1. Thanks magiceye,... for the visit and the appreciation... :)

      Thanks!

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  10. Panchali, I think I can be honest with you. The logic is not flowing as well in this poem as in your other writings. The last para defies the first para in its mood and appeal. The second para on beautiful mind is defied by the third para on butterfly mind.
    I await your masterpiece, Panchali! Make me comment in ecstasy!

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    1. Oh, Bhavana...This was written in a hurry ( in half an hour to be precise)..hence the discrepancies n aberrations...I appreciate your honest feedback.
      I shall look into it if I ever re-write it. Thank you very much for your suggestion... :)))
      Promise to give you a better one next time :))))

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    2. Bhavana,

      I have re-written the parts you have mentioned... it really helped.Thank you.
      Take a look when u have the time.:)

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    3. Ahh...the flow is so powerful now...these lines"
      Feel a fire rise within, with no guilt, weight of sin
      The inner self has eyes you do not see; but, look for it
      You will hear it thump; there's balm in its beats"--aah, aah. Balm in its beats--how magical! This verse is lovely--a true Panchali poem! Thank you for the treat!

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    4. Ahhh..Bhavana, I was waiting for you to come and read it again!! I am thrilled you liked the verse now. I think I can pat myself on the back, since I managed to captivate you...:)Thanks for everything. I am relieved...:)
      xoxo

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  11. The inner voice will come through; it has eyes you do not see
    Look for it; you will hear it's thump; there's balm in its beats
    Gracefully banish the devil within....rushing headlong leads nowhere
    Let angel of peace spin in circles around you,


    I LOVED this part. Ammazing. Wish I could do poetry! Best of luck!

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    1. Sandy,

      It is always gratifying for a writer to find a reader who is able to read the unwritten emotion behind the lines....especially when it comes to poetry:)

      Thank you for a wonderful comment. You made my day today. :))) I hope I will see you more often on these pages..
      Thanks for your good wishes..:)))

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  12. Poetry at its best! I agree with others here.. I so loved your last part.. Amazing and congrats on your win on IndiBlogger Lakme Contest!

    Someone is Special

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    1. Someone is Special....wow! i love the name of your handle :)
      Thank you....for the good news!!...I came to know through your comment about winning the consolation prize! whoooohooo !

      Glad you read it.. and that you enjoyed. It is very gratifying to win a pat on the back from people of your caliber..!!I hope I will see you more often on these pages....
      Thanks a ton once again...

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    2. I will come again and again to read wonderful poetries..

      Someone is Special

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    3. Someone is Special,

      What a lovely way to say it...! Great...Stand by please... :)))) More comin' up soon, my friend.

      So pleased to see you here... so very VERY pleased. :)))Thanks!!

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    1. Rajesh,

      I am glad to see you here... hope you will keep coming... :))))Thanks for the compliments!!

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  14. I love the 3rd paragraph. Good work!!

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    1. Meera,

      I am gratified that the 3rd paragraph managed to grip you. I am pleased...:))
      I hope you will keep coming now that you have found the way to my place... :)))

      Thanks a lot!

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  15. Meera,

    I am gratified that the 3rd paragraph managed to grip you. I am pleased...:))
    I hope you will keep coming now that you have found the way to my place... :)))

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  16. I loved the essence of the poem. Stick with the right and kick the wrong... Very beautifully said, lines touching the chords of the heart! All the best :)

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    1. Arti,

      Thanks for the lovely comment... coming from you that's quite a compliment..:))
      Thanks for your wishes..

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  17. Stay away from fleeting sensations of pleasure

    They distort minds-- like lightening, strike;
    And when that happens, hearts pound, thoughts dry out;
    Ignorance becomes the anchor of life
    Temporary elation spreads nightmare.

    Listen to the inner voice, it speaks in soft tones
    . leaves us with no mess ...


    like always was tempted to cop paste the whole poem ---the n settled for these lines drawing a dstinction between good and bad

    I echo Ghazala's comment

    you are fabulous
    love
    rajni

    btw I am ahaving some prblems with the net and finding i difficult to open sites so do bear with me if I am late

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    1. Rajni...

      I guess THIS is what one writes for... this understanding. You gave that to me today... Thank you...:)))
      Loved your comment.. thanks for dropping in..and please don't worry about the delay. Just promise to come back...(even if it is after a month, I wouldn't mind).... :)))
      xoxo

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  18. Brilliant!!! Really loved it! Especially the last para... All the best!! :)

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    1. Welcome to my post, rohanabstractedly :))!!Thanks for the pat on the back... it feels good... :))))
      Thanks for your wishes and would love to see you more on these pages...

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  19. Wow. Really nice :)

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    1. Welcome here, JJ...:))

      Thank you...! I'm so pleased you liked this... :)))))
      Hope to see you here more often..

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  20. i have no problem in admitting in public that i didn't understand a thing :D. but i am your fan and i like all your posts even though i don't understand them :D. so, all the best for the contest!! you have to win it!! you are the best!!!

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    1. LOL!!! Debojyoti you had to rub it in....... now dont make me cry laughing..hahaha.

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  21. Awesome lines Panchali Jee..very well written..:-)

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    1. Thanks for that 'adorable' comment, Nagini. You made me feel so good. :)))
      This is the kind of compliment that a writer covets. I need not tell you how pleased I am. :))
      A Big Thank You..!! xoxo

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  22. the last para really has a lovely message..liked it very much..

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    1. Welcome to my space, Ranita... :)))

      Your comment has made me grin with pleasure:D
      I hope you will keep coming, now that you've found the way once... :)))
      Thanks a lot!

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  23. A lovely flow with words. But sorry, I cannot really agree with the content. i think it is in fleeting seconds, most of our memorable moments are recorded. I think guilty pleasures have their own arena of expression. There are no crisp boundaries between good and bad. the lines are blurred. I believe real happiness has nothing to do with being good or righteous. It about finding the thing that you want to do most and keep at it. You have a strong way with words. I would like to see a poem about something I can relate to- (like pain, happiness, loss, etc) rather than a piece of advice. (Rather a strong comment- But then It's just what I think...)

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    1. Welcome to my space, Muthu!
      You humble me with your words of praise ...:)But..ooopss...that's honestly a strong comment! But, I like it. Normally, I prefer not to advocate...or write this kind of poetry. But, this time I did. Let me explain what made me jot down these lines...
      Well...we are fear driven, aren’t we…? Fear of losing out, of not being good enough, of being not happy; there are so many flavors. We are not in touch with the core of our being. All our power resides within us, untapped and unused.( that's purely my thinking, mind you!).. Instead of taking steps to unlock that inner-power, we operate from a shallow, surface level where we are at the mercy of any stray influences that come our way through the outside world. And we get swayed… disoriented… blinded… and get lost..Be Fair to Yourself--that's a small piece of advice from me... !:)
      What you say also makes sense. Don't get angry...soon you'll get to read a poetry of your choice...:D Amen!
      Hope you'll visit my space again...:))Thanks a bunch!!

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  24. Lovely! I loved the way you included follow the right and repay the worse in the poem. Great work and flow. :)

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    1. Saru,

      I am gratified that the poem managed to grip you. I am pleased...:))
      Your words matter to me more than I can tell you...Thank you :))xoxo

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    2. Thats so sweet of you Ma'am. Glad to find you here:) BTW, I love your status messages on Fb:)

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  25. Great work Mam .. Great flow

    ATB for BAT

    My Post - Vikas Khair - Two Minutes

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    1. Welcome to my space, Vikas. Thanks for your kind words. Hope to see you more on these pages.

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  26. Very nice. Two minutes to fight away the temptations and stay on track! Sweet presentation.
    BTW, I dont think there is an English equivalent for jigardhanda. It is not a Tamil word too. The word just defines the drink :)

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    1. You GOT it, Meoww :)) Welcome to my page...
      Oh, thanks for the info! No worries.....shall dig out one day :D
      Now since we have met..hope to see you on these pages :))
      Thank you.

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  27. Nice poem with a spiritual feel to it.

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    1. Welcome here, TF...:)) I am pleased you liked it. Do visit again :)
      Thank you!!

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  28. was reading this and feeling that this is such a powerful way to describe what goes on within us and that it should actually be provoking a huge discussion not only on the poetics of it, but also on the content. and then i scroll down and see the comments, and realize that it is already in place. love the way you structure your presentation, prose or poetry. feels great to read something like this.

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    1. Subhorup,

      Thank you dear friend. It's been such a pleasure to have you along on this journey... to share... to learn... to feel what goes on inside us!Indeed...one can have a solid session on the content of this blog.

      I am happy you could connect with the theme. I am also pleased that you enjoyed the flow. For a writer (even a wanna-be writer like me), your words are immense encouragement. Thank you.
      Hope to see you more on these pages!

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  29. trust me, well I know u knw..this :D, but maam u r a terrific writer .....awesome lines to describe such an important lesson of life "inner voice", loved every line of yr post :)

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    1. Saikat,
      Yes it does describe a very intense and private moment. ...almost Indescribable....But, you heard the unsaid... you read the unwritten. You heard the echos of the inner souls!!
      Thanks for the pat on the back, and for the visit. :))
      Hoping to see you more :)))

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  30. I welcome you very warmly.
    I am writing to you from the distant Polish.
    I am charmed your blog and great photos.
    I will be happy when you find time and visit my blog.
    Lucy-Maria

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    1. Lucia Maria! Welcome to my space :))
      Thanks a lot for being here with such a nice comment. I am glad you liked the photographs and the blog. PLease do visit again.

      Panchali

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  31. Spending two minutes to listen to inner voice is really important. Wish we all could do it without inhibitions.

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    1. Welcome to my page, aativas :))Thanks for the 'value addition'!
      Hope to have you here again:)

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  32. That's a lovely poem ma'am. very optimistic :) .. All the best for BAT and I'll be rooting for you to win :)

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    1. Neha...;)How amazing it is, isn't it, to find echos in other people's hearts...? It humbles me every time.

      Thanks for the encouragement:) xoxo

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  33. Pleasure is transient yet we can't stop seeking it.

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    1. Purba..:)
      Sums it all--- Risks are a part of life, but p:))leasure is tempting!!
      Thanks..

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  34. Wow!...That's a beautiful poem with beautiful message!

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    1. Valli..:)
      That was an awesome endorsement...! I do appreciate :))Thank you.

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  35. Very inspirational...beautiful...

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    1. Sreeja... :)

      Glad it resonates with you. Thanks for coming by.. :))

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  36. Be your own architect. Well said.

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  37. beautiful poem mam indeed and a very good advice in the last few lines of the poem.

    god helps those who help themselves , so the idea is to walk the talk and do anything u do with full heart and give it ur best

    Open letter to all Indians-Bikram's

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